Comments & Reviews

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• Nicotine Oct 05, 2008, 6:04 am

[general comment]

I did like this, especially the closing! So sad . Although I can relate @_@. You know, there are benefits to admiring someone from afar; sometimes you find out what a jerk they are and wonder why you liked them in the first place. Am I speaking personally? Naw, never...XD

I thought these lines were odd though:

"...though my heart it does harm."

"There's nothing that you could have lacked"

I understand you're trying to rhyme but I think they could be reworked and the second is kind of long and throws the beat of the poem off to me a bit.

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• Until-time-ends Oct 03, 2008, 9:22 pm

[general comment]

I totally know what you mean by this poem. I've went through it too. (Ugh.)
I really love the emotions and the overall feeling. Your rhyming is far better than mine.

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• Until-time-ends Oct 03, 2008, 9:22 pm

[general comment]

I totally know what you mean by this poem. I've went through it too. (Ugh.)
I really love the emotions and the overall feeling. Your rhyming is far better than mine.