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Soon he let her go and then he jumped onto the dance floor with all the Goths and threw himself about like an embarrassing dad at a wedding.

Ahahaha! I love this line *^o^* and I liked the story overall, even though it's hard for me to imagine Aya so out of character, even when drunk. I think the you're a whore Youji was a bit abrupt, but at the same tiime, I like the way the idea of Youji being promiscuous is what prompted their fight, cuz I soooo know that this is exactly what they would fight about!

Great job conveying that manipulative and sneaky Omi! You've got his attitude and his way of dealing with things down pat *grins* Thanks for sharing!